Trade of Change: Friday Fictioneers

I’ve decided to jump on the Flash fiction band wagon thanks to Ted Strutz‘s urging. *Waves to Ted* Writing something in only 100 words is new to me, but I’m willing to take on the challenge. Today’s prompt is also provided by Ted – yay Ted! Your comments and critiques are welcome, and feel free to join in and participate. You can find Friday Fictioneers here, hosted by the gracious Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

**Trade of Change **

                They crowded the tight space. Spread out before them were scores of jewelry, sunglasses, and something the man called DVD’s. People pushed and shoved to touch and feel the items.

                Darlene picked up a pair of sunglasses, turned them over in her hand. “How much?”

                “How much ya got?” The greasy guy flashed a golden tooth smile and looked her over.

                A siren rang out. Everyone scattered. Darlene turned and ran. Glancing over her shoulder she saw the police cuff the golden tooth man. It was illegal to sell items from the dead yesteryear. She clutched her new sunglasses tightly.

100 words

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Since I do so much to music I thought I’d share a little black market shopping inspiration with you.

Can you imagine a future where the things we take for granted today would be considered illegal or contraband? It’s not beyond the realm of possibilities.

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To read more great stories by talented writers based on this photo prompt, click the link…   
To join the group and write your 100 Words, check out the Friday Fictioneers blog  and visit…  Rochelle…
Image copyrighted by Ted Strutz

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About Debra Kristi

Debra Kristi is a mother, an author, a Pinterest addict, and sometimes DIY home decorator. Hang with her to organize your everyday and leave your mind open to the fantastical.
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83 Responses to Trade of Change: Friday Fictioneers

  1. Sandra says:

    ‘Dead yesteryear’ – great concept. Enjoyed this.

  2. Great story, Debra! Being a Fringe fan, especially this final season, yes I can imagine a world like this. Love your song choice! I’ve never heard it before, and was surprised at how it just kind of pulled me in. Think I’m adding it to my Spotify playlist. 🙂

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Oh yeah, this season especially. How easy would it be to slip into a total big brother or watcher controlled state? Too easy, I’m afraid. Glad I could share a new song with you. I’ve always like this treatment in particular.

  3. I enjoyed your story, Debra – great concept to work with. And I’m a Fringe fan, too. 🙂 Welcome to the Fictioneering gang. 🙂

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Thanks, Joanna. Glad to be here. It’s always great to meet another writer and Fringe fan. It’s funny, I hadn’t even considered this season of Fringe until Kristy mentioned it. But I can really see the influence now. Ha!

  4. Hi Debra,
    So glad you listened to Ted and jumped in. I enjoyed the subtlety of your piece, the clues that let us know this is set in a bleak future. You set the tone without bashing us over the head with it. I’m looking forward to reading more of you in the near and not so bleak future.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Thank you for the warm welcome. I’m glad I joined in as well. I really appreciate the compliment on my short piece. Thank you. I had fun and look forward to more in the future.

  5. writeondude says:

    Well done, Debra. You certainly nailed that one nicely. Could be a lot more to come from this scenario.

  6. Well, that’s such a huge possibility coming on the world. Glad you wrote this and fun too…Welcome aboard!

  7. Krystal Wade says:

    I love this! Very visual and intriguing. I’d suggest connecting the sentences in the last paragraph somehow…to keep the flow. 😉

  8. Cool story! It takes skill to work in a twist like that in so few words. Oh yeah, I can easily imagine a future like that. 1984, anyone?

    • Debra Kristi says:

      1984 may have come and gone, but the concept hangs over our heads. It could still happen. It’s a frightening thought. Thank you for your thoughtful words. It helps to know I am developing my skills as I’d hoped to be.

  9. susielindau says:

    Hey! You joined the gang! I was one of the originals and named the group. Since I love photography, I do my own thing some Fridays.
    Well done Debra! The future’s so bleak, who needs shades?

    • Debra Kristi says:

      I did! I did! A few little bird told me they preferred my stories to my other blogs, so… here it is! I love writing this stuff, too! And I can share my writer’s voice this way. It’s a win, win. I thought you used to be in the Madison Wood gang. I also noticed you’d started writing based on your own pictures. I get that. You take some lovely pictures.

      Yep. Not enough word to cover what the sky looks like. But maybe the government doesn’t want them hiding their eyes for other reasons. So many possibilities.

  10. Emma says:

    That music is chilling. Love the word ‘yesteryear’.

  11. This is a great piece, Debra. Loved it. Flash fiction isn’t something I’ve really tried before, but it fascinates me. Not that I need more stuff to do… lol. But, I think shorter pieces challenge us differently as writers, and it might be good to flex those less developed muscles from time to time. Thanks for the link! I’m going to check it out.

    • Debra Kristi says:

      I agree with you completely. I find it much easier to write something at 300 to 500 words than 100. This posses a unique challenge. But I also like the nice quick read and blog size. It’s a win on multiple levels. I hope you decide to join in. I really appreciate the compliment. Thank you.

  12. I really enjoyed this piece. Like others have said, it feels like a snippet of a larger work. The song is absolutely haunting.

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Thanks so much. I appreciate you taking the time to stop in. I hadn’t thought about it becoming a larger piece, but I always keep an open mind. You never know where that next story may come from.

  13. vb holmes says:

    Interesting to see if she ever gets to wear her contraband shades. Good story.

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Yes, I wonder if she will. Thanks so much for stopping in and reading, V.B. I appreciate the compliment. I really enjoyed your story, “Oozin’ Liquid Rubies.”

  14. Sheila says:

    Love the “dead yesteryear” also and the whole feel of the story. It makes me want to keep reading to find out more about this world.

  15. brudberg says:

    I love this piece of fiction, and hope you continue. I loved the song, and I recognized so well. But it is a cover… Seems to be Tears for Fears.

    • Debra Kristi says:

      You are spot on about the song. The original is by Tears for Fears, but I find this version much more suited to the feeling of the piece. I hope to stay with Friday fictioneers, schedule allowing. Thanks for stopping in, Bjorn.

  16. Russell says:

    Hi Debra,
    I’m glad you decided to join us. Enjoyed your story and hope to read more from you. Thanks for stopping by mine.

  17. Hi Debra,
    Nice first story. Welcome and enjoy the ride. This seems lilke some kind of harsh futureworld, very creepy! I mistyped my link in the list. Here’s the real deal: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpresss.com Ron

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Hi Ron! I’ve tried all your links but can’t get them to work. Same goes for this one. 😦 I’d like to read your story. You’re right, it is a bleak and harsh future world. I really appreciate your visit and comments.

  18. janet says:

    Welcome, Debra. I liked the “dead yesteryear”, too. The golden tooth adds to the vendors general sleaziness. 🙂

  19. Diana Beebe says:

    What a great story, Debra! There is so much going on there. There seem to be so many things today that are leading us toward 1984 and Brave New World behaviors. We need to be alert, don’t you think? Anyway, loved your story.

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Thanks, Diana. Like Rich (below) points out, there are many things that we used to think were alright that are now illegal (meds/smokes). But I sometimes fear a world heading in a deeper, darker direction than that. It’s like the saying, “Power corrupts, absolute power corrupts absolutely.”

  20. Great story, Debra. You say so much in so few words. I’ve experimented with 55 Fiction, but perhaps need to try out the 100 word variety. (Anything more seems too intimidating!)

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Wow. 55 Fiction. As in only 55 words? Now that has to be hard! I thought 100 words would be hard. You barely get started and you are done at 55. That takes talent. I wouldn’t mind a slightly longer flash, but I enjoyed this challenge. Maybe you’ll feel the urge to jump in at some point??? 😉

  21. boomiebol says:

    Very well done, i really like your take. Thanks so much for stopping by mine

  22. Parul says:

    This is a very different take on the prompt!
    Glad to have you onboard! I too would like to thank Ted for urging you, or we might have missed out on your writings and music!
    Nice song too!

    • Debra Kristi says:

      I might need a lot of pushing, but that’s only the shy introvert in me. Ted’s pretty good at pulling people out though. 😀 Thank you for your kind words, they mean a lot to me.

  23. billgncs says:

    supply and demand, good one.

  24. rich says:

    i think if we look hard enough, we’ll find lots of things that used to be legal and now are not. also, last sentence, change “tight” to “tightly.”

    • Debra Kristi says:

      You’re right. We probably don’t have to look that hard. If we skip over the obvious years of prohibition and look a little further, doctors used to prescribe things as cures that today are known to be very dangerous and unsafe drugs. Again, you’re right about that last change. Thank you, Rich. 🙂

  25. tedstrutz says:

    Yea! You made it… and in such fine fashion… start of a book??? I knew it was going to be special when I read ‘something called DVDs’.

    • Debra Kristi says:

      My goodness! What are you doing taking the time to read blogs when you are in the beautiful state of Hawaii? I can guarantee you my husband won’t allow me such liberties when I get there. LOL. Now see what you did? 😀 I don’t know if this is the start of a new book. Maybe. I’ll have to let that idea simmer for a little while.

  26. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Debra,

    Thank you for your story and the song to accompany it. The dead yesteryear sent chills through me. Loved your imaginative take on the photo. The future will be far stranger than we can ever grasp and your story captured an image from those times yet to be. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Thanks so much, Doug. That’s a future I hope to never see. 😀 Although I didn’t mind bringing it to life for a short while. Thank you for your kind words and for your visit.

  27. Lora says:

    HI Debra ~ Welcome to FFictioneers. Thanks for joining us per Ted’s persuasion. Nice first story…chilling and scary. One World Order? I wonder…if DVD’s are dinosaurs … why do people still need sunglasses? I would think they’d have eye implants by then. I know this world is predicted, but glad I won’t be around to see it. Perhaps the “Rapture” will occur before then.

  28. Nice unique tale which travels a long way in a few words. I have a feeling that as long ago as it might have been “dead yesterday” is still sometime after I was born, so I’m clutching those glasses for dear life!

  29. Anne Orchard says:

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers Debra, I hope you enjoy it as much as I have in the short time I’ve been here. I loved your story, well crafted. I hope she gets to enjoy the illicit pleasure of the glasses. Thanks for stopping by mine too.

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  31. wmqcolby says:

    Shades of Bradbury … my all-time favorite author. He would have loved this premise. So do I. More, please!

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Thanks. I never know where the flash is going to take me. I liked yours as well. Nicely done. I’ll stop by a little later and leave my comment. I totally didn’t catch the “Ray” meaning the first time I read it. I like when a piece surprises me.

  32. Linda says:

    It certainly isn’t beyond the realm of imagining that we might find ourselves in this state, you only have to remember the book burnings in Russia a little over a century ago to realise we are never too far from the police state. Well done and nice to meet you too – thanks for stopping by mine and sorry I’ve taken so long to respond and reciprocate 🙂

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