Henry : Friday Fictioneers

Well, it’s been a crazy week. I’m sure you’ve all had them. When you say you’re going to do certain things and then they just don’t happen. That’s how it’s been. I was lucky enough to attend the fabulous Orange County RWA Chapter meeting last Saturday and listen to the amazing Christine Ashworth and Jessica Brody talk. The bonus, I got time with my RWA (Romance Writers of America) and WANA (We Are Not Alone) buds (Tameri, Kate, Jenny, Bethany, and Christine, to name a few). Woo hoo!

When I got home, baby girl got sick. I cuddled and hung with her for the next few days. No blogging or social media. When she finally felt well enough to go back to school, (don’t think she didn’t try to work it. Because if she was too sick to go to school, then she would be too sick for a trip to Disneyland this weekend to celebrate her birthday. She had to fess up to the truth. She loves Minnie Mouse.) I wanted to crawl under the covers and nap for a day ‒ so I did. It was nice. 😀 That’s why the blogging schedule is off this week. The intended Tuesday post didn’t get out and I’ve decided to post Friday’s a day early. Lucky you! Hehe.

Welcome to another installment of Friday Fictioneers. The goal: write a 100 word fiction (exactly) based on the picture prompt provided. New participates are always encouraged to join in on the fun. Visit Rochelle for future prompts. She’s the one keeping us all organized. She’s also the cool owner of today’s picture. Thank you, Rochelle.

~Henry~

Where: Trinkets & Treasures Curio Shop       When: 1916

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copyrighted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

“Please, Mama.”

“Henry, no.” She pushed the crayons towards him. “Play with these. I need to make a quick call. Okay, baby?”

Henry sighed and began to doodle. Grabbing the phone she turned her back on the counter. The curio shop door bell rang. Vivi waved to Mr. Hanshaw. “Be but a moment.”

Call finished, she turned and pulled Henry’s art closer. “Oh no. Why did you scribble on the Bradsworth portrait?” She looked up. “Henry?” No answer.

Panic.

“Henry? Mr. Hanshaw, have you seen‒”

A sympathetic look. “Vivi, you forget your medicine today? Henry’s been gone five years now.”

(100 words)

~oOo~

Hope you enjoyed this rendition of Friday Fictioneers. There are many more talented writers participating. The number of links included grow by the day. To read more just click on the happy little frog. He’ll take you to all the shared stories for this week.

Thanks for stopping by! I appreciate your support and love hearing what you have to say.

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About Debra Kristi

Debra Kristi is a mother, an author, a Pinterest addict, and sometimes DIY home decorator. Hang with her to organize your everyday and leave your mind open to the fantastical.
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84 Responses to Henry : Friday Fictioneers

  1. LOVE this post! And it was great seeing you on Saturday, woman. Hugs!

    • Debra Kristi says:

      It was great seeing you! I’ll do my best to be there Sunday, assuming Saturday at Disneyland doesn’t kill me. LOL. Oh! Thank you for loving my little flash fiction.

  2. I loved that one! Kinda creepy 🙂

  3. JKBradley says:

    Makes me think of that movie ‘Dream House’ with Daniel Craig. Well done, Debra.

  4. tedstrutz says:

    I did enjoy! ViVi must have used the crayons… Eerieness in 100 Words!

  5. elappleby says:

    Nice twist at the end – gave me the shivers 🙂

  6. Patricia says:

    Always a fun challenge and always you rise to meet it! Good job.

    Sorry the kiddo was sick. I’ve been a little under the weather myself and in fact stayed home one day this week and under the covers – well mostly under the covers. Unfortunately I won’t get the benefit of a trip to Disneyland as a treat. (sigh)

    Patricia Rickrode
    w/a Jansen Schmidt

    • Debra Kristi says:

      I’m sorry you were under the weather. I hope you’re feeling better. I’m glad you took the time off to rest. You need to listen to the body. You’re welcome to zip down to Disneyland this weekend for a treat. I’ll be there on Saturday! Is there a chance you’ll be at the SoCal RWA in March? I finally got registered.

      • Unfortunately I won’t be able to make it to the SoCalRWA in March. Our own chapter here in Sacramento has a 3-day retreat planned for May in Tahoe so I’m saving to attend that. I guess I should sort of be there since I’m the President and all, but money is a wee bit tight right now. I vote that the Prez goes for free!

        I’ll keep your chapter in mind for the future. Would love to hook up with some of you southern California WANA gals.

        P

  7. wmqcolby says:

    Wonderful. Human and real. Great job!

  8. jenniesisler says:

    Wow, I didn’t see the ending coming – what a great twist!

  9. boomiebol says:

    Oh wow…didn’t see that coming, very well done

  10. kz says:

    that’s an amazing twist…it could even go two ways, either it’s really really sad.. or really really spooky ^^ great story

  11. nightlake says:

    found it very sad than creepy..very well written

  12. Tom Poet says:

    Debra
    You can go in a few directions with this, nice work.

    Tom

  13. Very nice, Debra. I did not see that one coming either. It is a little creepy, but overall, sad to me.

  14. I really need to STOP trying to catch up on blog reading in the middle of the night, lol. I think you nailed creepy here. My first thoughts were The Shining, and some movie I have a very vague memory of called Audrey Rose or something. Both of them scared the snot out of me. Good job. Glad your monkey is better, and have fun at Disney this weekend! 🙂

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Maybe it’s the flash fiction you should avoid in the middle of the night. 😉 Hmm, makes me wonder if you would like the current story I am working on. Audrey Rose made a huge impression on me as a child. That had to do with the reincarnation of a young girl that died in a fire. It was so sad. I don’t think I’d compare this piece to The Shinning, but thanks for that awesome compliment. Monkey is feeling much better. Too bad for the cat. LOL.

  15. Sandra says:

    Now that was spooky and unexpected. Nice one.

  16. Dear Debra,
    The good comments have been taken. Suffice it to say that I really enjoyed this piece right down to the surprise ending.
    We have a regular customer at our store that Vivi puts me in mind of. Well done and glad your baby’s on the mend.
    shalom,
    Rochelle

  17. rgayer55 says:

    Great ending, Debra. I caught me off guard. Losing a small child would drive most of us crazy.

    • Debra Kristi says:

      It’s a tough one, I’ll give you that, Russell. That’s why they have so many wonderful programs to help people going through the grieving process. Poor Vivi needed to go as far as meds. Thanks for the great compliment.

  18. Abraham says:

    Oh! For a moment I thought the child had been stolen, but you had a different twist in mind.
    Great work!

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Hey Abraham! I had to fish your comment out of my spam. Sorry about that. 😦 Bad spam. Thanks for your fabulous words. They make me feel all warm and fuzzy. 😀

  19. I love the twists you always put on tbese!

  20. I read it that Henry’s coming back, and that’s a good thing. May be a bit spooky along the way though, Nicely done!

  21. susielindau says:

    I love the ones with a twist and this one is twisted! It could be a ghost or she has hallucination problems….nice!
    So great that you got to see everyone!

  22. I work with elders who can at times be in this space. You captured it well.

  23. Hi Debra,
    I can relate. I’m off my meds most of the time, especially when I’m writing comments. Good twist ending! Ron

  24. Ack! I literally – and I use that word literally – had my hand over my mouth for several seconds after reading this. (In case you’re keeping score, I went with the non-paranormal explanation that Henry was kidnapped – perhaps by someone who came into the store – and Vivi, not being on her meds, had slipped into a delusional reliving of the day he disappeared).

    • Debra Kristi says:

      Wow. Really? I’m not keeping score. 😉 I went through many phases while writing this. I thought he had died and she had trouble accepting that. He’d been kidnapped, again-trouble accepting. Both of which she required meds for. Finally, he really was a ghost. I hadn’t made a decision which way the story went. Maybe I should have put a pole up and let everyone else decide for me. LOL.

  25. muZer says:

    Awww.. So sad. Feel for Vivi. Captivating story and didn’t imagine it would end like this.

  26. writeondude says:

    Good, spooky tale. Nice twist. Well done.

  27. Very eerie! Have a terrific time at Disneyland today!

    • Debra Kristi says:

      I can make a pretty good guess which way you would go with this story. 😉 We had a fantastic time at Disneyland. Just got back. The birthday girl feel asleep as soon as we got to the car. Long day for her. But she was excited to finally be tall enough to ride Space Mountain. She now wants to wait till she taller to do it again. LOL!

  28. Oh how sad, but I recon that the comfy blanket of denial is needed.

  29. YJ says:

    When reading your story I thought of the problems associated with Alzheimer. You have done a great job capturing a broad audience.

  30. rich says:

    why did he scribble on the portrait? because it was there! that’s how children work. well done.

  31. JakiCheli says:

    I’m intrigued by this post and would like more info about what you are doing and how I might participate but not until WITCOE is published. How long will this be happening? Thanks Debra for the info. L&P jaki

    • Debra Kristi says:

      You can join at any time, Jaki. There’s no rush. The Friday Fictioneers is an ongoing thing. By the way, I love that title – White Is The Color of Evil. Very cool.

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